其实这几个玄词大家可以通俗的理解为句子间的衔接词和代词的使用， 以及线的分组的合理性。具体怎么做，不妨看下文。
当然评语当中还充斥着对于用词及语法的 “吐槽”，这里就不一一剖析了，词汇丰富度及语法多样性的必要性相信大家都懂。
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The lines illustrate the changing percentages of the electronic appliances ownership and the weekly time allocated to housework, including washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning, from 1920 to 2019. Overall, with the proliferation of versatile electrical appliances, people had been living a more convenient life with higher efficiency, which can be mirrored by the ever-decreasing hours spent in addressing domestic trivialities.
☀ 开头段的改写当然是要把原先的句式/用词变一变，但是想不到同义词怎么办？想到了发现句式还是与原来差不多怎么办？于是不妨优先考虑将题干的主语替换了，这样用词、句式也就自然发生了改变。
☀ Overall 段落居然出现在了这里？是的，可以的，毕竟overall 段落是写图表笼统、宏观的情况。出现在这里预告下文内容，合理吧。此外，overall的写作可以不必出现增长下降的趋势，不妨多用形容词来描述数据背后的事实。
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The ownership of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners had seen massive growth. Specifically, in terms of refrigerators, no household 【描述0%不必要出现具体数字】owned it in 1920, but the ownership of them had the sharpest increase compared with that of the remainders. Notably, since 1980, having refrigerators had become commonplace 【好用的形容词来描述程度：多】, without no household being no exception 【描述100%不必要出现具体数字】. While owing vacuum cleaners had not been as popular as owing refrigerators until 2000 【又是一个好用的形容词体现了程度，同时通过比较完成衔接】, the ownership of them also witnessed a substantial growth of 70% 【实义动词：witness】. Those drastic increases contrasted sharply with the slight one in the ownership of washing machines, from 40% to roughly 63%. 【通过比较完成衔接】
☀ 常说线图分组依据就看上升下降趋势即可，那这种全都上升的线怎么办？答案是按照纵轴的位置分，也就是纵轴位置一开始靠下，但后来居上的分为一部分；一开始居上，但后来居下的分为另外一个部分。
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In terms of the weekly hours spent on housework by each household, a dramatic plunge, from 50 hours to 11 hours, happened over the period from 1920 to 1980. In the next 20 years, the figure had been stable, and then the number was taken to a new low (10) by a slight slip.
☀ 单独一条线可太好写啦，但是写的时候注意：主语的多样性。
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